RESOURCES 寫作第二部分:表達意見

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範文一(B2+)

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例題

第二部分:表達意見
Part II: Expressing Opinions



請依據下列指示寫一篇約80字的短文,建議作答時間15分鐘。
Read the following prompt and write a short text using approximately 80 words. You should spend about 15 minutes on this task.


You are Lynn Pan. Your university has recently opened a new food court on campus. It includes a vegetarian restaurant, two tea shops, and a well-known fast food restaurant. You decided to express your opinion on this new addition to campus.

In your email, you should

  1. explain whether you think this is a good change;
  2. make at least one suggestion about how the food service can be improved on your campus.
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範文賞析與建議​

以下範文獲得B2+,範文末附上具體賞析(請見標號1-2);另,也提供調整建議,以利全篇文章更為流暢(請見標號3)。​

Dear Administrator,​
My name is Lynn Pan, and I'm a student at KMU. I'm excited about the new food court and thrilled that it includes two tea shops since I love having beverages during class. However, there' s still some suggestions I would like to propose. First of all, I hope there can be more options. Since I' m not a vegetarian, there will be only one choice if I want to dine in this food court. Also, fast food is of course delicious, but not healthy. Therefore, it would be better if there could be more than one restaurant for us to choose from. Lastly, if possible, I would like to have a cup of coffee or a comfortable and relaxing area to hang out between classes; therefore, it would be awesome if the food court can also include a café.​
Thank you for your time and attention.​
Sincerely,​
Lynn Pan
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賞析:
本作品符合題目兩點要求,組織分明、表達通順並有適當證據支持論點。語法及搭配詞雖偶有錯誤,但無礙表達。​

  • 充分敘述觀點,並提供合理佐證。
    [F]ast food is of course delicious, but not healthy. Therefore, it would be better if there could be more than one restaurant for us to choose from.
  • 書信格式正確,並以適當結語收尾。
    Thank you for your time and attention.

建議:
然而,為讓本作品表達更為流暢、語意更為連貫,文字可再稍作調整,以下舉例說明:​

  • 主詞與搭配動詞須一致。
    ​However, there are still some suggestions I would like to propose.