RESOURCES 寫作第二部分：表達意見

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範文二（C1）

發布日期 : 2023-12-27|瀏覽人次 : 1401|資料來源 : 培力英語能力檢定測驗

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第二部分：表達意見
Part II: Expressing Opinions


請依據下列指示寫一篇約80字的短文，建議作答時間15分鐘。
Read the following prompt and write a short text using approximately 80 words. You should spend about 15 minutes on this task.

You are Lynn Pan. Your university has recently opened a new food court on campus. It includes a vegetarian restaurant, two tea shops, and a well-known fast food restaurant. You decided to express your opinion on this new addition to campus.

In your email, you should

  1. explain whether you think this is a good change;
  2. make at least one suggestion about how the food service can be improved on your campus.
表1

範文賞析與建議​

以下範文獲得C1，範文末附上具體賞析（請見標號1-3）；另，也提供調整建議，以利全篇文章更為流暢（請見標號4）。​​

Dear Administrator,​
➊I am writing to express my gratitude for the opening of the new food court on campus, and one suggestion for improvement.​​
➋The opening of the new food court is definitely a great addition to the university and for students and staff to get food with convenience. It also increases the food choices available on campus and reduces the waiting time during lunch hours. ➍A big thanks to the school administrator for the effort. ➌While the new food court is quite small, there are two tea shops, which might be an over-supply. If I may make a suggestion, I would recommend changing one of the tea shops to another restaurant when the next opportunity opens. That will make an even better combination of available foods. Once again, thanks for the arrangements for the new food court.​
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Sincerely,​
Lynn Pan​​

賞析：
本作品符合題目兩點要求，能清楚表達自身想法，提出的建議有搭配充分的論述。文章組織完整，能靈活使用連接詞及轉折詞。語法、詞彙鮮有錯誤。​​

  • 善用主旨句，提升整體組織和連貫性。
    ➊ I am writing to express my gratitude for the opening of the new food court on campus, and one suggestion for improvement.
  • 充分闡述觀點，並提供證據加強論述。
    ➋ The opening of the new food court is definitely a great addition to the university and for students and staff to get food with convenience. It also increases the food choices available on campus and reduces the waiting time during lunch hours.
  • 句型與語法能靈活使用，富於變化。
    ➌ While the new food court is quite small, there are two tea shops, which might be an over-supply. 

建議：
然而，為讓本作品表達更為流暢、語意更為連貫，文字可再稍作調整，以下舉例說明：​

  • 正式信函中避免使用不完整句構。
    ➍ ​I am grateful to the school administrator for the effort. ​