RESOURCES 寫作第三部分:整合式寫作

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範文二(C1)

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例題

第三部分:整合式寫作
Part III: Writing an Integrated Essay



請依據下列指示寫一篇約120–150字的文章,建議作答時間30分鐘。
Read the following prompt and write a short essay using approximately 120–150 words. You should spend about 30 minutes on this task.


In class, your professor presents the two figures on the next page during her talk on "open-book exams"--that is, exams where students are allowed to bring notes and reference books.

She then gives you an assignment on the following topic:

Should open-book exams be encouraged in universities?

In the assignment, you should write a short essay in which you

  1. summarize the main points shown in the two figures;
  2. state your own opinion on the topic, using the information from the two figures as well as citing examples from your own experience.
表1

Figure 1. Students' views on open-book exams
Note: The results are based on survey responses from 850 university students.

表2

Figure 2. Professors' reasons for giving open-book exams
Note: The results are based on survey responses from 125 professors.

範文賞析與建議​

以下範文獲得C1,範文末附上具體賞析(請見標號1-4);另,也提供調整建議,以利全篇文章更為流暢(請見標號5)。

The two figures show both students' and professors' views on open-book exams. According to the pie chart, professors who promote open-book exams have quite diverse reasons, with promoting critical thinking, learning deeper, and suiting the learning styles of individual students, being the top three reasons. As for students, more than half of them seem to disagree with the idea of open-book exams, stating that they cost even more time for students to look for answers. Still, some students stand on the positive side, expressing that such exams are closer to real-world experience and help access deeper knowledge and skills.​

In my opinion, I strongly agree with the idea of encouraging open-book exams in universities based on the following reasons. First of all, open-book exams help relieve students' stress on preparing for the tests. For regular tests, I usually need to memorize as much important information as I can, which stresses me out all the time. Yet, I only need to figure out the concepts and ideas behind the information while preparing for open-book tests. It helps reduce more than half of the time as well as stress on the preparation of the exams. Secondly, open-book exams allow students to learn more deeply, and thus gain a better understanding to the knowledge. This is because they force students to figure out the concept, instead of relying on mere memorization. Last but not least, such exams grant students with the ability to look for solutions when facing problems. For college students about to enter the job market, such problem-solving skills will be the core value they can provide for corporations. At the same time, the problem-solving skills are what the company value the most when searching for talents nowadays.​

In conclusion, I believe open-book exams should be encouraged in universities, since they help reduce students' stress, help students learn more deeply, and equips students with the ability to solve problems with the resources they possess.​


賞析:
本作品充分符合題目的兩點要求,能整合圖文資訊做妥切表達,論述中針對支持開卷考試的原因提供了充足的佐證。文章結構整體清晰連貫。語法和詞彙的運用適切,鮮有錯誤。

  • 清楚摘要圖表資料重點。
    Still, some students stand on the positive side, expressing that such exams are closer to real-world experience and help access deeper knowledge and skills.
  • 善用主題句,提升文章整體架構的連貫性。
    In my opinion, I strongly agree with the idea of encouraging open-book exams in universities based on the following reasons.
  • 適切運用語法和詞彙,文章語意清晰明確。
    For regular tests, I usually need to memorize as much important information as I can, which stresses me out all the time.
  • 充分表達觀點,並藉由提出佐證強化論述。
    [O]pen-book exams allow students to learn more deeply, and thus gain a better understanding to the knowledge. This is because they force students to figure out the concept, instead of relying on mere memorization.

建議:
然而,為讓本作品表達更為流暢、語意更為連貫,文字可再稍作調整,以下舉例說明:​

Among them, the top three reasons are promoting critical thinking, learning more deeply, and suiting the learning styles of individual students.